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[- - - TAURUS - - -]

Check the skillz

Taste The Rifle With Double Digits On My Tounge
Black Lungs, Hungover With My Buds Stung
Spinal Split Amidst High-Pitched Spit
Souls Spirit Tipped It's Limit Finite
Manhandlin' My Mangled Emotion
Inner Implosion, Exploding Commotion
Dying To Die, Bullets Yell Homicide
Internal Cries, Vice Seeks Life
Tipple The Liquor My Sinful Is Tickled
Being Sicker Is Trivial, Then Critical
I'm Left With Broken Dignity, Can't Withstand
Pick Up The Pieces, With Shattered Hands
My Future Echo Holds Ebony Angular Drapery
Detailed Immensely Through A Murderous Melody
Fire And Steel Race To Their Demise
Bullets Yell Genocide
My Arrangment With Self-Enslavement
I Made It

[-N-]

Man, throw a beat in the back and upload it. It sounds good.

You might want to change finite to infinite - it flows and sounds better and makes more sense. That's probably what you meant anyways.

[nik0tine]

I Agree With Neel But Why Did You Capitalize Every Word In This Poem?

[-N-]

I don't even think its a poem - sounds more like a rap or spoken word which is why I'll let it slide.

[- - - TAURUS - - -]

Originally Posted by -N- ^

Man, throw a beat in the back and upload it. It sounds good.

You might want to change finite to infinite - it flows and sounds better and makes more sense. That's probably what you meant anyways.

Nah it's a poem, but I've rapped for so long that there's always gonna be that influence in my poetry, and if I used infinite then it wouldn't make sense. Thx ya'll for reading. I have some others I might put up.

[- - - TAURUS - - -]

Also I use a bit of slang, should've mentioned that, once again my influence from hip-hop.

[Kanshisha]

hmmm yes i agree with -n- look for a background music / beat...