Working title - Page 3

nik0tine · 01-03-2007, 03:13 AM

I only read the first bit of it but there are some grammatical errors that severely detract the readers attention. I think alot of this needs to be rewritten so that the sentences flow more smoothly.

Sagensyg · 01-03-2007, 07:21 AM

Yay. I feel happy to have received half of this in a PM.
A+

(I am not your teacher in disguise.)

Spammerman · 01-03-2007, 09:26 PM

I changed a lot of stuff around when I had to print it. It sounds a lot better.

eiko guy · 01-04-2007, 01:49 AM

So describe the three characters to me like give me their backgrounds please.
how did aleander get good with the sword things like that

Spammerman · 02-02-2007, 12:17 AM

Wadda yuh know, I got 101 on it. My writing teacher says Im an excellent writer and that the story was well written. The second installation is due today.

nik0tine All about looking. Location: Dalmasca!	#17 I only read the first bit of it but there are some grammatical errors that severely detract the readers attention. I think alot of this needs to be rewritten so that the sentences flow more smoothly.
01-03-2007, 03:13 AM

Sagensyg D a e d a l u s Location: Kanto	#18 (permalink) Yay. I feel happy to have received half of this in a PM. A+ (I am not your teacher in disguise.)
01-03-2007, 07:21 AM

Spammerman For Rent	#19 (permalink) I changed a lot of stuff around when I had to print it. It sounds a lot better.
01-03-2007, 09:26 PM

eiko guy I miss kinje longaway :[ Location: In boring old Texas but in a few years..	#20 (permalink) So describe the three characters to me like give me their backgrounds please. how did aleander get good with the sword things like that
01-04-2007, 01:49 AM

Spammerman For Rent	#21 (permalink) Wadda yuh know, I got 101 on it. My writing teacher says Im an excellent writer and that the story was well written. The second installation is due today.
02-02-2007, 12:17 AM