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[eiko guy]

I decided to make a poem just now so i'll let it flow and see what I come up with

The pain inside,
Is coming out.
Nowhere to hide,
I need to shout.
"Get away from me,
Save yourself"
My emotions on the shelf

I keep just one
The one I hate
Its a monster
My soul it ate.

I lost myself
I couldn't find
The good in me
It destroyed my mind

I lived inside
The pain until
I found a friend
upon a hill
She said to me
That its okay
I didnt feel
The monster that day

She locked him up
inside of me
Thats how I realized
She was the key
The key to my
Light and dark
She had the key to my heart.

What do you think I seriously just made this up five minutes ago. Give me criticism even if it hurts.

[Owen Macwere]

I don't know, it is really nice. good flow and endings. I like it.

[eiko guy]

YAY I have some things I want to change but I also rather keep it the same so I preserve the pure me-ness

[Dynast-Kid]

It sounds and flows really well, but I don't really understand what it's about.

[eiko guy]

its like thers a guy that is devoid of emotions except for hate because hes been hurt. he meetes a girl that showed him love and unlocked his emotions. it didnt really have a meaning cuz i just made it up

[Dynast-Kid]

Originally Posted by outlaw starwind ^

its like thers a guy that is devoid of emotions except for hate because hes been hurt. he meetes a girl that showed him love and unlocked his emotions. it didnt really have a meaning cuz i just made it up

I see...

[f f freak]

It's sounds really good and I saw a rythm in it. Very well thought up.

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CRAWLING IN MY SKIN