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Default (P) You sang about brown in a love song.

You sang about brown in a love song;
You’ve been piping more than you let on.
You string them up, string them along,
You say bad habits are long dead & gone:
Crack pipe felt the river‘s swipe.
Foil under the soil
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You’ll realise, in due course:
You’ve been flogging a dead horse.
Old 08-22-2006, 03:41 PM
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I love it. I think I told you this before, but I especially love the line about the crack pipe -- it adds such a raw quality to the whole poem.
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This is a little different than the usual poem I would expect from you.
Not that it's a bad thing. I rather enjoyed it. And you showed how well you can adapt to different styles.
I am glad to see you back writing poetry, my old friend. :)

Old 08-22-2006, 09:01 PM
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I like it! I love it! I am going to marry it.
Old 08-22-2006, 09:53 PM
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it's different. I don't know if I like it, but I can say that it's different in a good way.
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I like it~
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Thanks for reading it and for the positive comments! I hadn't wrote any poems in ages, but it seems I am getting back into the groove.
I have written another just now:

Are those statues of giants,
Or giant statues?
Spare them a thought,
As you borrow their shade.
Sitting in the dark.
Pretending to be dumb,
Feigning deafness.
I can see you.


Maybe it's a tad short, but whatever.

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Old 08-24-2006, 12:13 AM
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That, is also, a highly great poem, of high greatness.
Old 08-24-2006, 10:58 AM
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