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[Resha]

'tis short, 'tis true, but the shortness makes it sweet and simple. It's not one of those mangled poems where people try to use elegant words and lose all the feelings That's bad! I love the last line, "I can see you." It adds an air of mystery to the poem, and it's almost as if the poem's ending on a cliff-hanger (Though not sure if poems can do that )

[Laugh at face of Danger]

i quite like the second one ^^

[themagicroundabout]

Thanks for readin'.

Got two more I did today. They're a bit so so and a bit meh, to be honest. But hey, I'm a-posting them anyway.

You left no footprints in the snow
I followed you, I should know
On an oak tree in the park
You carved your name in the bark
A hurriedly scratched tattoo
So that people might remember you


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There's a man
Out in the hallway
And he says he won't be moved
You don't believe me
When I tell you
His existance can't be proved
Can't you see?
I gaze for hours
Upon his muscle, skin and bone
I'll draw his portrait
So you can see
This man who stands unkown

[Alive-Man]

I. Like. The. Second. One. Especially.
They. Are. Good.

[Resha]

I love the first one. Out of the two new ones you posted, that is. Also, I hope you continue your other poem soon =) Whenever you get inspired! I really liked that one.