Secrets & Raindrops [P]

Necronopticous · 07-12-2006, 12:21 PM

we steadied our palms in overcast
showering ripening children gray
prairies sprouting puerile lily pads
dressed in polka-dots and lollipops
surfacing spoiled over muddy soil
we'll rinse and we'll resuscitate
peeling away layers of strawberry skin

nik0tine · 07-12-2006, 12:25 PM

Simply excellent.

Cruise Control · 07-13-2006, 05:09 AM

Just awesome.

Dignified Pauper · 07-14-2006, 01:25 AM

simply astounding. pure imagery, great language

Necronopticous · 07-14-2006, 10:01 AM

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Rye · 08-27-2006, 11:23 PM

Excellent.

The imagery is beautiful.

Necronopticous · 08-27-2006, 11:25 PM

Didn't think this was going to get any more replies. Thank you for reading. I'm glad you liked it!

Moon Rabbits · 08-28-2006, 04:11 AM

I like the last two lines especially.

Although, some of the stuff on your primary colours website I prefer.

Necronopticous Former Staff Normal Reco Location: New Astro City	#1 Secrets & Raindrops [P] we steadied our palms in overcast showering ripening children gray prairies sprouting puerile lily pads dressed in polka-dots and lollipops surfacing spoiled over muddy soil we'll rinse and we'll resuscitate peeling away layers of strawberry skin
07-12-2006, 12:21 PM

nik0tine All about looking. Location: Dalmasca!	#2 (permalink) Simply excellent.
07-12-2006, 12:25 PM

Cruise Control Banned Location: St. Ivalice	#3 (permalink) Just awesome.
07-13-2006, 05:09 AM

Dignified Pauper Score: 0 out of 2 Location: Ed's Technicolor Nightmare	#4 (permalink) simply astounding. pure imagery, great language
07-14-2006, 01:25 AM

Necronopticous Former Staff Normal Reco Location: New Astro City	#5 (permalink) Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
07-14-2006, 10:01 AM

Rye Kiss Kiss Fall In Love ♥ Location: College @ Roto13's Island	#6 (permalink) Excellent. The imagery is beautiful.
08-27-2006, 11:23 PM

Necronopticous Former Staff Normal Reco Location: New Astro City	#7 (permalink) Didn't think this was going to get any more replies. Thank you for reading. I'm glad you liked it!
08-27-2006, 11:25 PM

Moon Rabbits so gangsta it hurrrrts.. Location: Caaaaaaaanada.	#8 (permalink) I like the last two lines especially. Although, some of the stuff on your primary colours website I prefer.
08-28-2006, 04:11 AM