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[Kiero]

this story is new im hoping ull like it..im not good with grammer so u may see some incorect writing so dont complain anyway hope u like it, ill try to update it as soon as i can..il probably do 1 chapter a day or maybe 2.

well its starting now.

----------CHAPTER 1------------------------------------------------
One sunny day in the city of Kalik there was a large celebration going on. Parades,parties, eveyrthing was there. Why? It was that special day where the old "ruler" was picked. The old ruler was a just man, he was now old though. The rulers were not always fair and kind though. At one point in the past there was a ruler who was evil, he almost destroyed the town..but that was in the past and this was now. The new ruler was the son of the previous, previous ruler. That one before the one that was retiring was a strange man....he died after he had found this times new ruler on the dusty paths of Kalik, no one really knew what had happened. But some way the boy was able to fend for himself. People though of this as many things. Some thought he was cursed but some said that this was a good sign. No one, exactly sure. It was about a quarter to noon and the new "ruler" was about to give his speech. The eyes he had were pircing, it was a blend of purple and blue with silver, gray hair. He rarely did speak but people said he had great ideas. Well whatever they were they were about to be said. He spoke only one sentence at first but it was one no one would soon forget. He spoke, " As my first decree i want all the men from the ages of 17-20 arested." The people of the town were frightened. The he spoke again saying, "Give yourself up now and you will not face punishment. We will search the records to see if anyone is lying." Mostly all cooperated, mostly. One person, blone brown hair, brown eyes, tan skin wearing no protection but in his hand he had a sword. Hooked on his pants he had a gun. His arms and wrists had scarlet red bands wrapped on. He drew the sword and took the gun out. He wasnt the smartest person so he shot a random guard and then he just started bringing havoc. He shot about twenty gaurds, and slashed about thirty. He was shot in the arm, the bullet went deep, so depe it made him drop his gun. He tried to keep his arm holding the sword but his arm was weak and he droped it. The gaurds showed no mercy and kept shooting his arms and legs, but made sure they wouldnt kill him, they were ordered not to kill. He was taken to the city hall for further questioning that is where they kept all the city records...including his. Once they reached there the new ruler, his name was Balick was about to start questioning him. "Why?"he asked. It was a simple question. Why? "Did you not want to be arested? Did, did you think you were going to be a hero?"he asked. "What is you name?" he asked with a frustrated tone. "WHAT IS YOUR DAMN NAME?!!" now yelling. He said nothing to respond though. "@!#$" he murmerd. The gaurd then looked up his name in the city files. "His name is Jake." the gaurd said. "Throw this @#$%^ in the prison gate. Dont let him out until a month after you let the others out. They sharted to shoot Jake, in the arms and legs with supressed weapons so they wouldnt kill him. Then they beat him up and dragged him into a cell. Then he waited and waited and waited.....days never ended to him.
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[tidusguy#1]

this isnt bad good job