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[childroland]

John woke up looked at his clock. midnight it didnt seem like midnight to him. He got up and poened the blinds. He could see the sun rising from his room it seemed more like five in the mourning to him. He knew now his clock was off.
He put on his blue jeans with the hole in the left knee ( wich was the style at the time but honestly he didnt like it), his plain black shirt, and it was too hot for him to wear a coat ( wich is weird because it was the middle of winter and it was snowing lightly outside).
He went into the bathroom and brushed his teeth *potty mouth* . Then he combed his short black hair. After hge was done in the bathroom he grabbed his bookbag wich had his math book, his science book, all his cds, and a few dvds.
He decide to go to Frnks house because...
now you finish it from here

[Reti]

Sorry, but to be honest, in my opinion, this isn't good writing material. You also need to make it more interesting to get the viewers hooked on, and wanting to see more and more and more. Also look at the spelling, punctuation and such. (I have a lot of experience with writing )

[Boosk]

Ever heard of grammer? Always spell check everything you do, even if you don't have one, it's not hard to do yourself. There is nothing more annoying to read spelling mistakes...I admit I make them quite alot, but that's because I'm not a machine...Anyway, it has nothing to draw the reader into, nothing for them to relate to etc. Try reading more, that's the best way to learn how to write.

Kagga

[Reles]

I really hope they're teaching you grammar and spelling in English, because from what I can see they're not. :S That or you're being incredibly lazy and just ignoring every typo you come across. It's quite obvious that the word poened should be opened and that's an easy error to correct, I think you know how to spell some of the words, but for some reason you aren't. And Frnks? how about "Frank's" Heh, I'm not meaning to put you down here, but it's obvious you didn't spend a lot of time on this.

[childroland]

Yes it is I am a fast typer/writter my hand matches my mind. When I get ideas they come down as fast as I can get them well the idea for this was I start a story and somone else finishes it. Like I make a part then somone else ads a part then somone else till finally it is done. I have a different story to work on right now.

[childroland]

Ok I have watched for awhile and this how this work think of it like an rp only you can only use this character. You are only supposed to post on peice of the story but I dont care if you do more so far one person sounds like a miracle

[Bart's Friend Milhouse]

Originally Posted by childroland

John woke up looked at his clock. midnight it didnt seem like midnight to him. He got up and poened the blinds. He could see the sun rising from his room it seemed more like five in the mourning to him. He knew now his clock was off.
He put on his blue jeans with the hole in the left knee ( wich was the style at the time but honestly he didnt like it), his plain black shirt, and it was too hot for him to wear a coat ( wich is weird because it was the middle of winter and it was snowing lightly outside).
He went into the bathroom and brushed his teeth *potty mouth* . Then he combed his short black hair. After hge was done in the bathroom he grabbed his bookbag wich had his math book, his science book, all his cds, and a few dvds.
He decide to go to Frnks house because...
now you finish it from here

Unfortunately john didn't make it to Frnks house because a big mean seven foot tall moderator closed this thread before he got there

[childroland]

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