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[FallenSilence]

This is a song that I wrote. Opinions please!

Drowning

FIRST VERSE
Broken down and broken hearted
The day we met was the day it started
Time to fade, Time to burn
Time to die, Time to learn
All that's fake, All that's real
What I know, What I feel

CHORUS
Drowning in my own despair
I called for you but you weren't there
F**ked it up, it isn't fair
I hope deep down that you still care.

SECOND VERSE
Life just isn't what it seems
Shattered hopes and shattered dreams
Time to show, Time to leave
Time to act, Time to grieve
What's the point? What's the aim?
Such a waste, Such a shame

CHORUS
REPEAT FIRST VERSE
CHORUS (TWICE)

I'm drowning, yeah, yeah, yeah (FOUR TIMES)
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah

[Polaris]

Pretty nice song!

[nik0tine]

its really good. not my type of music, but its good nonetheless. good job!

[selphie666]

Very gothic, which is cool, and easy to read, rhymes very well

[Project G]

I think your songs sound like Punk Rock songs

[nik0tine]

Originally Posted by Satans_apostle

I think your songs sound like Punk Rock songs

sounds more like emo to me. unless you are talking about bad religions "punk rock song" in which case i msut say 'what the hell are you talking about'?

[FallenSilence]

Thanks for your opinions, guys. I posted this on another forum and people basically called it crap and told me to give up writing. Weird how different people think, huh?

[Az Lionheart]

keep up the good work and dont listen to people who say it is crap they are just jelous cos they dont have your talent