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[nik0tine]

The air
on a harp string.
Beauty.





Note: If you are going to tell me that this haiku is 'wrong' because the syllable count isn't 5-7-5 just don't bother posting. You're an idiot.

[Momiji]

Fantastic!

[chionos]

The first two lines are perfect, but honestly I really don't like "Beauty." I think (i.e. to me) part of the art of haiku is saying something obvious but somehow unexpected in the 3rd line.
for example:

The air
on a harp string.
Laughter.


Again, the first two lines are perfection though, and it's not that the 3rd line is bad or anything, just mildly a letdown relative to the beauty of the first two lines.

[Dolentrean]

Beauty in something so simple!