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Alright, now for my latest Story. Hope this one turns out to get better views than my others.

Prologue: The ashes of Death give Birth to a Savior



High in the sky the sun was shining brightly. The air was filled with a cool breeze as the people casually strolled through the park walkway, laughing and chatting as if nothing was wrong. However there was one thing about this scene that was wrong. Amidst the passerby’s a tradgedy was taking place. One could say that the people themselves were the reason this scene was so sad.

Kneeling on the ground was a young man, no older than eighteen. His brown hair hung low as his head was bent over. His face was drenched in tears as he looked down at the women in his arms. Her long blonde hair hung off her lifeless head, her skin lacking color. She wore a once pure white prom dress, though now the chest was stained in a dark crimson.

The boy had long lost track of time at how long he had been here, though from the stains across his Tuxedo it was obvious he had been their for a while. He only sat their stairing down and the bullet hole punctured through the young girls dress.

And yet no one had stopped to see what was wrong. Not a soul had spared a second glance to this scene that was right in front of their eyes. No one had called an ambulance, no one had offered any form of assistance.

He had known why they had ignored his plight. The people of this town had grown so use to such a thing, no one was phased. Sights like this had become commonplace. Finally, after being involved with this incident, he had become disgusted. Not only with these people that walked casually by, but with himself as well, for once being just like them.

As he sat their, holding her in his arms, he made a promise to himself. He vowed that he would
make a change, he would be the catalyst that would start a change among these people, “I will be the one who saves them,” he said quietly to himself.

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I was hoping you would spontaneously continue sounds like an interesting world.
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I fixed up how the Prologue Read, so it should be much better now.

Also, the Word attachment of the PRologue, so that it's nicer to read.

Nvm, it won't take that file type.

Dammit. Ah well, the rewritten Prologue is still here for you.
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