A poetic mirage? Impossible!

Mirage · 04-11-2007, 08:51 AM

White
Everywhere I look
That same colour
Well, not everywhere, just nearly
A bit more colours would be nice
Spring is coming
Maybe my wish will be granted

And in case you thought it was, it's not about winter.

Ichimonji · 04-11-2007, 09:06 AM

I think this poem is lovely. It's an excellent way to express your emotions through the atmosphere around you. I also enjoy how the smooth the words blends in with the calmness of the surroundings.

Kanshisha · 04-11-2007, 10:59 AM

No offence but.. It sounds more like a quote than a poet..sorry if it's offending..

Mirage · 04-11-2007, 04:54 PM

You are offending, offense is written with an s :(.

Zeldy · 04-11-2007, 05:00 PM

omg thats good

Discord · 04-16-2007, 04:58 AM

Originally Posted by Mirage ^

You are offending, offense is written with an s .

Actually, it's not. Check your OED.

Nice poem.

Mirage · 04-16-2007, 06:24 AM

Yes it is. Offense is written with an s. Offence is not though.

Hazzard · 04-16-2007, 02:37 PM

It's decent.

Mirage bot Location: Interconnected tubes	#1 A poetic mirage? Impossible! White Everywhere I look That same colour Well, not everywhere, just nearly A bit more colours would be nice Spring is coming Maybe my wish will be granted And in case you thought it was, it's not about winter.
04-11-2007, 08:51 AM

Ichimonji Immortal Lion Location: Canada	#2 (permalink) I think this poem is lovely. It's an excellent way to express your emotions through the atmosphere around you. I also enjoy how the smooth the words blends in with the calmness of the surroundings.
04-11-2007, 09:06 AM

Kanshisha ~ Golden Shadows ~ Location: Australia	#3 (permalink) No offence but.. It sounds more like a quote than a poet..sorry if it's offending..
04-11-2007, 10:59 AM

Mirage bot Location: Interconnected tubes	#4 (permalink) You are offending, offense is written with an s :(.
04-11-2007, 04:54 PM

Zeldy put a donk on it Location: Old school Hollywood	#5 (permalink) omg thats good
04-11-2007, 05:00 PM

Discord Banned	#6 (permalink) Originally Posted by Mirage ^ You are offending, offense is written with an s . Actually, it's not. Check your OED. Nice poem.
04-16-2007, 04:58 AM

Mirage bot Location: Interconnected tubes	#7 (permalink) Yes it is. Offense is written with an s. Offence is not though.
04-16-2007, 06:24 AM

Hazzard Location: London	#8 (permalink) It's decent.
04-16-2007, 02:37 PM