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[Martyr]

As the title states, I suck at poetry.

Casting that aside for just a moment, I was blessed to recall that practice makes perfect. So I'm going to start writing poetry. I will put all my poetry here.
I will feel to post back 2 back as much as I like, since other posters have gotten away with it.
I will probably write a poem whgenever I feel like it. Some will obviously be better than others given time and patience and interest, but the important thing must be to write, right?

If you feel like you would like a poetry journal to practice in, feel free to use this one. It will be a safe haven for crappy/in the works poetry.

Anybody who has constructive/destructive criticism is also welcome, since years of social interaction with humans has hardened my heart to criticism, and made me a being capable of gliding toward self improvement even with the harshest and cruelest advisers.

But no poetry journal first post would be complete without a P.O.S. poem to kick it off with, so, uh, here goes!

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I guess it takes a moment to think up a theme, eh? Hmm...

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How about "Winning"

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Winning (not "The Pooh")

Winning isn't everything
Winning isn't nothing

Winning isn't happiness
Winning isn't sadness

Winning isn't peace of mind
Winning isn't isn't stress

Winning isn't control
Winning isn't weakness

Winning is never failure
Winning must be success

Winning often comes at cost
Winning can be priceless

Priceless but not peace of mind,

Or happiness

What, exactly, is it?
Winning?

[Not At All Reno]

i totally read winning as whining the first time around
it's pretty interesting if you read it like that too

[farplaner]

Originally Posted by Not At All Reno ^

i totally read winning as whining the first time around
it's pretty interesting if you read it like that too

I don't know. I doesn't seem to change the meaning very much.
Hey Martyr, you got one too many "isn't's" after "peace of mind"

That isn't isn't cool.

[Martyr]

Four stanzas had isn't. I was trying to create a scheme, or whatever.
But if it came off as bad, I won't try it again.

Why do you think it fails? Other than the fact that it's redundant, which would point. What about "isn't" pisses you off?

Anyway, I was going to try and create a heavily imagery based poem tonight, but I'm not in the mood. I can't think creatively.
Maybe later tonight. Probably tomorrow afternoon.
Thanks for reading.
Spoiler: And my apologies, kinda

[oddler]

He's saying that you have an extra "isn't" on one line. The line with stress in it.

[Martyr]

Oh, great. And here I was hoping that my POS poem was actually going to spark a style issue.

And it's a *insert muffled pseudo curse word, like darn here* typo.

[farplaner]

Calm down. You're right: it's a typo, but when you begin your post with "I suck at poetry" you can't really expect much serious consideration.

...Plus, I've posted one or two "experiments" myself and haven't received a single response, so save it.

So tell me, what's the meaning of the poem?

My impression is that you're trying to make a point about the emphasis on "winning" in society (being successful), but the poem ends with a question. So are you just trying to convey that you don't understand that emphasis?

[Martyr]

The meaning?

HAHAHA!
I'm not deep enough to talk about a "meaning."

If it means anything to you, then there you go.

It's just a poem to me. My first job here is just to put one together.