my poem called Red Wine

chii · 02-14-2007, 04:11 AM

the sickness thats killing me
the color so red its scary
coughing it up in spurts
its tatse so metalicy
pour me more of the bitterness
pour me more of the sickness
pour me more of that red wine
the taste is so bitter and metalicy it wil kill you......

hahaha i got this poem idea from pomagranite jucie and my sickness..... (ps... im not realy dying lol.... or pucking blood or coughing blood)

Ashley Schovitz · 02-14-2007, 04:18 AM

I see a few problems with this poem just mispells of will and metalicy which I looked up and it's not even a word, maybe tyou meant metallic? Anyway the poem was okay.

Ashley Schovitz A true ffix lover Location: In the southside	#2 (permalink) I see a few problems with this poem just mispells of will and metalicy which I looked up and it's not even a word, maybe tyou meant metallic? Anyway the poem was okay.
02-14-2007, 04:18 AM