Eyes on Final Fantasy Forums > General > Writer's Corner > JAVIER'S BIRTHDAY STORY

[JAVIER]

Originally Posted by Goldenboco ^

To be totally honest, the story contains bad grammer, very little happened, and it was boring to read.

IT IS GRAMMAR, EVEN STUPIDS KNOW THIS!!!!!!!!!!

[LoveArya]

lol
no offense JAVIER, but i agree with Boco

[rubah]

I think the style is very good. The grammar is off, but it's endearing all the same 8)

[Lekana]

I liked it. Maybe a tweeking on grammar but it was a fun story.

[Meat Puppet]

Mostly boring, though I did enjoy the part about the talking cat. I also found the links to wikipedia quite interesting. I didn’t learn anything, though.

61/100

[Leeza]

Meat Puppet has stated my sentiments of your story, Javier.

I have deleted posts here that were not on topic and very spammish. Do not add more of the same. You know who you all are.

[JAVIER]

Originally Posted by Meat Puppet ^

Mostly boring, though I did enjoy the part about the talking cat. I also found the links to wikipedia quite interesting. I didn’t learn anything, though.

61/100

Thank you

[Martyr]

My first guess:
Grammar sucks on purpose. It is some meekly shallow attempt to make a story interesting through bizarre gramma, improper wording, and vague and surreal topics. Much like John Lennon's In His Own Write
Unfortunately, it isn't surreal so much as forced randomness, which isn't random at all. nd that's more like confusion which makes it nothing more than a poorly done piece os shi work.

Take 2:
Then I decided, wait, a guy named Javier from Mexico writing about his birthday in shredded english with shallow and inexplained ideas? That sounds like it's exactly what my spanish papers must have looked like!
So it may possibly be an english assignment for class.

Except, of course, for the fct that Javier has proven himself to be literate on other occasions, blowing this theory out of the water. Kind of like Jaws, you know? KABOOM!

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But it had a talking cat...

It's pretty much impossible to grade, but I highly suggest that somebody steal it from the forums, slap a C with a little circle on it and try to get the thing published before Javier figures out the publishing system in America and becomes a multi-billionaire writer first!