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Kanshisha
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Default Cloud and Tifa playin

Well this is the same thread as Squall and Rinoa playin but in FF7:
This is the link for Squall and Rinoa playin from GoldenBoco:
Squall and Rinoa playin

Ok here goes:
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Cloud: I think ill start a new game....

Tifa:OMG! i remember that! See there! thats me! *Points at a little dot on the screen...*
Pic 2
Cloud: Hey watch it or ill turn it off!

Tifa:Cheeze look how pixely you are
Cloud: I still look better than you...hehe
Tifa:What did you say?!
Cloud:Nothing...
*Punches cloud on the arm*

Cloud:What was that for?!
Tifa:Sshhhh look an enemy you better look or you'll....
Cloud: Just be quiet....
*Barret, Jesse ,biggs and Wedge storms in*
Cloud: WTF is this a circus?!Heard of knocking before you enter?
Barret:Hey! i remember this! damn i hated this part of this game...Damn 'cuz jessie never shuted up after her foot got stuck on that thing...
Jesse:Hey shut up....At least i have a proper hand...
Cloud: Hey stop it you two
Barret: Yer whatever just keep playin'
Tifa: Barret Look...
Barret: I am!
Barret: Oh i remember this! You took like 1 hour killin' these guys...
Cloud: Barret just bloody watch! No comments

Cloudamn i hate these guys...
Tifa: c'mon! i wanna see myself...
Cloud: then go to a mirror not me!
Tifa: *Rolls eyes*

Barret: Hey i remember that part man i didn't know why you saved....
*Cloud ignores by putting finger up...*

Cloud: Oh this bastard...This guy actually ripped my favorite jeans!
Barret:LMFAO who the hell cares 'bout your jeans?I found another pair like that and it costed 2 bucks...
Cloud:...whatever just be quiete or ill delete your game...
Barret: Tch wuss...

Next episode will come out soon....

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Old 01-10-2007, 12:23 AM
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Alright, seeing as this is an extention of my idea I will now critique it with utmost detail!

Hmm... the thread needs more humor, there are very few (if any) jokes in the episode. It seems as if its more or less, them playing the game and yelling at each other. Writing is difficult and takes time, it appears you rushed through the episode just to get it done. I too know that expirence which is why I'm going to advise you, never feel pressured to get your work done. I may be a hypocrit because I myself do that, but I say try to keep doing that to a minimum.


I know it may seem a bit harsh, but writing is a difficult thing which takes time and hard work to do well so don't think I'm insulting you, I'm trying to give you tips to improve your work.

Keep at it
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Well, you added pictures at least. They'll be great for backing up any jokes you happen to make. I'm sure once you combine the pictures with your jokes it will be great.
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Ok i edited it take a look...
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lacking in humour im afraid.

cloud and tifa playing FF7.

link to my original cloud and tifa playin.

im a laugh with the right crowd but im not a comedian or very funny person like some are.

the reason i gave up on it was because it was sort of a temporary burst of funny inspiration that died out as time went on.

the reason mine was successful for a while is because i though about what people find funny and what people like to hear E.G post 9 in that thread. i nearly never write stuff like that but i figured it would probably work.

carry on trying and take whatever advice you can get.
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Hmm im a funny person... just that i can't express it online... i also completely agree with you... I don't think i should make anymore... im not meant for this stuff... Thanks for the tips anyway..

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