(A) my manga

loza · 01-07-2007, 05:42 AM

i'd like some (constructive) critisim on my manga

i love drawing chubi characters and i drew these the other day...
(sorri if their a bit big but u can't see them properaly otherwise)

i don't know why i drew them i just did

so what do you think? should i improve on my couloring skills?

what can i do better?

StarlightAngel · 01-07-2007, 05:51 AM

The faces are too long, and the eyes are too large for the heads, even by anime standards (Unless you're going by Powerpuff.)

The lines are wiggly and the hair should flow better. Also, look up human anatomy. Even if they're in chibi, it'll help with stuff like hands and feet.

loza · 01-07-2007, 06:01 AM

Originally Posted by StarlightAngel ^

The faces are too long, and the eyes are too large for the heads, even by anime standards (Unless you're going by Powerpuff.)

The lines are wiggly and the hair should flow better. Also, look up human anatomy. Even if they're in chibi, it'll help with stuff like hands and feet.

thanx

the lines should be better but i had a dogey pen ( or hand...

)

StarlightAngel · 01-07-2007, 07:52 AM

Another suggestion: Sketch out the pictures lightly first, and then darken the lines you want to keep and carefully erase the ones you don't. I find it helpful for getting the right shape (or close to it).

Coloring-wise, it would also be better to color it with more care, filling it in completely. And for stuff like the wings, you could color lightly to create a sort of transparent effect. 'Tis all about the smoothness.

Avarice-ness · 01-07-2007, 08:49 AM

Elemental Fairies!

Cute! I actually like how you did the eyes, it's really cute for random doodle drawings, since you said that you didn't know why you drew them but you just did.

Makes me want to do an elemental fairy series.

loza · 01-10-2007, 12:28 AM

i did some editing to 3of my pictures (light, shadow(a.k.a darkness) and water) i can't scan them right now but i'll post them asap!!

41-Inches-Wide · 01-10-2007, 05:05 AM

OMG TOO CUTE FOR WORDS.

I am strangely reminded of Mirmo de Pon. It's that cute.
Good work on the colors, it doesn't hurt the eyes and each of the fairies have their own color scheme, so it's not at all glaring or too contrasting. Good job.

loza me likey bread sticks!!! Location: somewhere in the land of fairy bread...	#1 (A) my manga i'd like some (constructive) critisim on my manga i love drawing chubi characters and i drew these the other day... (sorri if their a bit big but u can't see them properaly otherwise) i don't know why i drew them i just did so what do you think? should i improve on my couloring skills? what can i do better?
01-07-2007, 05:42 AM

StarlightAngel nibble nibble Location: Munching on Usagi-san	#2 (permalink) The faces are too long, and the eyes are too large for the heads, even by anime standards (Unless you're going by Powerpuff.) The lines are wiggly and the hair should flow better. Also, look up human anatomy. Even if they're in chibi, it'll help with stuff like hands and feet.
01-07-2007, 05:51 AM

Avarice-ness ♥ Mayor of Zozo Location: Feasting on Chocobo's in Zozo	#5 (permalink) Elemental Fairies! Cute! I actually like how you did the eyes, it's really cute for random doodle drawings, since you said that you didn't know why you drew them but you just did. Makes me want to do an elemental fairy series.
01-07-2007, 08:49 AM

loza me likey bread sticks!!! Location: somewhere in the land of fairy bread...	#6 (permalink) i did some editing to 3of my pictures (light, shadow(a.k.a darkness) and water) i can't scan them right now but i'll post them asap!!
01-10-2007, 12:28 AM

41-Inches-Wide Special Location: Table of Elememts	#7 (permalink) OMG TOO CUTE FOR WORDS. I am strangely reminded of Mirmo de Pon. It's that cute. Good work on the colors, it doesn't hurt the eyes and each of the fairies have their own color scheme, so it's not at all glaring or too contrasting. Good job.
01-10-2007, 05:05 AM