Stars [Song]

Denmark
12-12-2003, 04:09 AM
the stars say we can't be together
what do they know
all that matters is i love you...

and did you know?

it will work out
forget what they say
what do they know
they're stars anyway

they're stars anyway

your friends think that you're too good for me
what do they know
all that matters is you love me...

and do they know?

it will work out
forget what they say
what do they know
they're stars anyway

they're stars anyway

we know we're right for each other
what do they know
all that matters is we're in love...

and did you know?

it will work out
forget what they say
what do they know
they're stars anyway

and did you know?

it will work out
that's what we say
that's all that matters
we're stars anyway
that's all that matters
we're stars anyway

Stayin Dizzy
12-12-2003, 04:48 PM
I like what you're doing with the lyrics, but what I would suggest is adding a LOT more to your verses. It's a very short chorus, and with short verses ( one verse has 3 lines) it almost seems repetitive. Also more lyrics will add some melody to it, but if you think about it most songs are 3-5 minutes long. It took me less than a minute to read it.

It's very lovely though so far, and I really feel the lyrics because I went through it when I was about 16. It's good how it is, but just beef it up a bit.

7/10

Denmark
12-12-2003, 09:51 PM
All the verses have three lines...

It's all I could think of...

Meh. *nods anyway*

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