[p] The lost voyage

Crawling through the coarse sand,
I feel the heat of a billion years knowledge.
As I part the cool waters with my hand
I can feel them screaming against me
Warning of a foreboding presence lurking within.
But yea, I will fear no evil.
Rupterous waves crash against me
And I close my eyes to taste the gentle breeze,
Kindling a warmth inside me.
As I stare out into the abyss, seemingly unaware of the setting sun, all that I can muster is the vision of her.
The soft caress of her hand kisses my cheek, and I stur...
Was it real? No...couldn't have been.
Again closing my eyes I see her. Smiling at me. Beckoning to come cuddle beside the warmth of the fire. Oh how passionate those days were! But then the thought is gone.
I open my eyes again, Bewildered at what is going on inside me. The nostalgic smells of the sea embrace my senses, and I find salty tears streaming endlessly down my face. In the distance I hear her call to me.
I try to force the thought away, and I see her again. She tells me she loves me. I plead with her to stay, and she grasps my hands softly. Her skin is warm, and feels like feathers, or perhaps a soft cotton. "Why?" is all I can bring myself to ask her. And as silently as she came...gone again.
I stare out into that deep blue abyss once again...And like the setting sun I let myself fall...I will be with you soon again my love.........




I thought this up on the spur just now...I felt like writing. Any good?

Wow... o.o that's a nice, interesting little piece of writing you have there. ^^

By the way, I love your sig. >D

Thanks, you really are a sweetheart. Probably the only person that takes the time to read and reply to my writing :)

I like it, if you put some structure in it you could make nice poem out of it... Or if you make it a little shorter, it could be a song (for metalcore or something, at least for some music that doesn't really need structure ;) )

Now that I think of it, this might as well be a lyric to a song from Bleeding Through... Pretty nice :)

I actually thought about restructuring it into a song, but I didn't really put any effort into this one, and I'm not putting it in my book (Exclusively for EoFF I suppose), so there's no point in changing it. But I liked the song idea. I might sample a few lines one day and actuallly make it a song.

Wow...I can really picture that. ^_^
What can I say? I liked it and your metaphors are simply amazing. I am inspired. ;)

I've never inspired anyone before as far as I know...wow?!:whoa: