Believe me I take no offense. In fact, I'm very glad I finally got a very indepth review on what I did wrong. If I only got responses saying what I did right I would never develop as a writer...
Now for a little response to what you said.
Yes I can agree that I tend to be better at plot and developing characters then anything else. Those tend to be my strong points in writing. And agree that Chapter 1 was very, very rushed. I'm still unsure exactly how I want that written and once I figure it out I intend to go back and fix it... although I was pretty happy with my chapter two. I do need to work on descriptions but I actually lowered the descriptions in my first few chapters on purpose (mainly in the Prologue and in Chapter 1). I tried to make the beginning friendly to lots of people even readers that can't find themselves reading long stories because often people will ignore a story just because the beginning is so long-winded. I've been slowly increasing the amount of detail in each chapter.
Thanks for the response hopefully it will help my writing in the future! |